this is so well-written! the writing is very descriptive and pleasant to read, with very good pacing which never drags or gets dull. you did a great job setting up nathaniel's character as this kind, gentle, well-meaning soul in the first half of the chapter, which makes his switch in behaviour seem all the more unsettling. it feels like we really get to know him before he changes, so it made it very effective.
i love yoyo's inner monologue too, there's some really funny quips in there ("so much egg on my face i could be a b'n'b" is particularly good haha)
the music is great, i love the filtered photo backgrounds, and i'm very fond of anything that uses unsettling and creepy chistian symbolism, especially when it feels nuanced here and not all ~ooh creepy~
this is a gem of a vn and i'll be looking forward to reading more of it, especially since it ended on a bit of a cliffhanger!